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my website is www.sfbrainwellness.com
HI Chris,1 of 1 people found this helpful
Your site is certainly clean and to the point. However, I would like to see you delve into the topics a bit more on your home page. I would suggest to not go overboard, but with topics as in depth as those you deal with, more information is called for and, in most cases, welcomed.
For instance, instead of:
Adjusting to Medical diagnoses
Adjustment to medical and neurological illness is difficult. Dr. Weyer Jamora can help you learn how to more effectively cope with your medical illness.
Adjusting to Medical Diagnoses
Adjustment to medical and neurological illness is difficult. (Add a sentence here to expand upon how and/or why it is difficult.) Through ?????, I (use I if you are the only primary contact, or use my team and I, if there are others) help you learn how to more effectively cope with your medical illness, resulting in (whatever the benefits are - 2 or 3 are fine).
Minor points to notice:
- do not use double spaces between sentences (fine when using a typewriter, but not a computer)
- using the first person makes it more personal and less clinical
- try not to use the word "can" if at all possible; it weakens the statement
I hope this helps.
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Looks good to me..